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"One more time, one more time.
One more time, please just let me roll one more time.."


CRITIC ME ON THISSS , please ?
I drew this..?! Woahh~
I really like this. I never knew I could draw like this..
I DIDN'T EVEN NOTICE MY ART STYLE WHILE DRAWING THIS..

I was really inspired by [link]

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:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star-half: Vision
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Impact

Vision: Vision is whether or not the artist had a deep meaning or story tat comes through with their art. I believe you accomplished the meaning quite well, though the delivery needs a lithe work. We'll get to that later, though. I love the Rolling Girl song, and the story that goes along with it. Though you could have used more to imply the story, the meaning comes through near perfect. Great job!

Originality: Points taken off here because even though it looks good, it's not really that original looking. It's somewhat flat in a sense; not much dimension, no background besides a shadow, etc. I do like what you did with the get though, which adds a little movement, but besides that, you see Miku, and your eyes go off the page, which makes the final result kind of tragic.

Technique: The folds in the clothes are near perfect. I just want to cover that now. While the folds look kind of odd in her right arm (The one facing the ground), since they don't fall naturally, everything else in the clothes look great.
Moving onto anatomy. Nothing sticks out to me as awful, but the legs really bother me. Everything else looks very fluid, and well proportioned, but her legs look really odd. The feet don't really touch the ground, the legs bend at an odd angle, the muscles aren't implied enough, etc. Everything else is fine.
Your coloring looks pretty nice, too, but you should have added more detail into the blood. Smear it, layer it, concentrate it in certain areas. You get the point.
Work on your tears, to. Here, they're mostly just little white circles without highlights, reflections, Or much transparency.
...I think that's it, though. Overall, pretty nice job c:

Impact: Impact is wether a piece leaves strong emotion on the viewer or not. Here, while it shows, and the emotion ones through, it's kind of dead. If you know the song, you know what she's going through, but if someone know the song, it would probably look kind of dead to them. work on adding dimension and details. It will pay off in the long run!
Hope I was helpful c: